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the story it self was ok but it was a little rough and it didn’t really have a flow at all.«12» Cya Later:)
Thel20anonymous readerReport 2013-05-10 10:58:11I’m not going to say it was bad but i will say that you really need to start proof reading. To Thel20, you should proofread your s, your writing and grammar was every bit as bad as the authors. Xxx video If you enjoy writing i say keep going, the more you write the better you’ll get, but please listen to people who give you advice on your writing, the’re only trying to help you. I’m not talking about one little mistake here, for the amount of text the errors were quite prolific.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-10 17:39:21hard to follow so i read a few bits twice but in the