Anny Aurora’s Teutonic Temptation Ravaged by Massive Ebony Shaft

3 s«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-06 09:58:20The overall premise of the story was good, but it was the presentation that needs a lot of work. XXX Grammar issues, spelling mistakes, text and paragraph formatting was horrid to name but a few. 3 s«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-06 09:58:20The overall premise of the story was good, but it was the presentation that needs a lot of work. So shitty one this strory Chow wan say no more write strory stinkys so like much shit!!!!!anonymous readerReport 2013-09-05 20:19:37Here’s the best constructive criticism I can give you, don’t bother submitting anything else until you learn how to spell, use correct grammar, and have content that doesn’t suck ass!!!!!!!«1» 3 s«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-06 09:58:20The overall premise of the story was good, but it was the presentation that needs a lot of work.