Gagging on a Thick Load from a Deep Throat Surprise

I note that the er didn’t refer us to any works of his/her own. First, run your story past one of the volunteer editors to refine the grammar, spelling and punctuation. XXX You left some great possibilities open for a second chapter. It will smooth out your style and make the story more “comfortable” to read. Second, please don’t leave us wondering what the two girls in the bathroom were up to. Ignore jerk s. Words were very strange, like using “defiant” instead of “definite” over and over implying it’s not merely a spelling error but some confusion on your part. Remember that it is always easier for people to criticize and insult than to actually work and (god forbid) think. First, run your story past one of the volunteer editors